The car suddenly stopped. I screamed a zombie sloth banged
on my window it was a green bony sloth. It had popping out eyes and a squashed
down face but still I was terrified of it. I started to open and close my door.
I screamed again because my door wasn’t working but then I realised my door was
locked. So I unlocked it and hit the sloth it flew about 6ft back and then I tried
to run away. It tackled and as soon as I hit the ground I woke up on my bedroom
floor…
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ReplyDeleteAmazing story, scary sloth! from Joel
ReplyDeleteMrs Fraser - scary nightmare Callum. You are certainly trying to use some descriptive words here. Can you back and add a metaphor or simile? How did you start to open your door, slowly, cautiously, quickly? Using adverbs to describe how you open something will make your writing more interesting for the reader.
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