NEK MINIT by phoebe
Left my scooter outside the dairy.......NEK MINIT the car stopped suddenly narrowly missing Drop Dead Fred escaping on my MGP, '' STOOOOOOOP '' I shouted as he sped at what seemed like a hundred miles an hour, across the road, down the ditch and face planted into the duck pond, I sprinted with all my might towards him, to go and help him get out of the ditch. I grabbed his hand it was all sloppy and muddy eeeeeew, but I had forgotten that he was a trickster and he pulls me into the bog.
''DROP DEAD FRED''
Mrs Fraser - you have included some WOW words here. I would like you to proof read and edit it now. Your first sentence is awfully long. If you shorten it, it will build up tension in your story.
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