The bob cat
bounced out of nowhere tackling it's mum to the ground. The mum fended it off and put up a chase
bounding under the orange sun.
Both were so busy playing they didn't hear it... The wolverine cackled
its witchy laugh. Suddenly sharp fangs sunk into the wolverine's neck. The mum meowed to her daughter and ran ahead.
She obeyed but suddenly realized they were separated! Tears sprang to
her eyes. She halted. There was a mysterious bath
with a brown lump. She got pounced on. She was
frightened. Then she smelt something:
“Mum!” she cried delighted.
Mrs Fraser - a very descriptive piece of writing Claire. I really like the sentence ..."cackled it's witchy laugh". I also like how you have some short punchy sentences as this builds up tension for the reader.
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