The cat
I was separated from my mum. I heard a mysterious sound in the hallway. '' should I,'' I said to myself as I slowly walk to the door. Then suddenly a bright orange male cat sped past me. "It was just the cat," I said to myself but as I came back I saw my cat heading towards the bath. "No!" I shouted to the orange furry cat but it was too late. Splash! The cat went in the warm soapy water. Then I hear the most horrible sound a cat could ever make, like a lion just about to kill me.
You have used some good descriptive language here. I like how you have thought about all the work we have done in class about figurative language.
ReplyDeleteI would now like to see you use a new line when using dialogue. Have a look in a novel and you will see the author uses a new line whenever someone talks. By the way, who is this? There is no name on it :)