I
was abandoned on the side of a mysterious forest . the leafs were orange, brown
and gold it was still midday all I have left is my poor little cat milo . As I
was thinking Milo leapt into the bush desperate to find him I lunged in after
him twigs scrapped and stabbed on my arms and legs thinking of milo a crept
slowly through the bush a warm breeze floated past me maybe someone is camping
here they might help me find Milo a jumped over the hill not to find a campsite
but a ginormous bath.
Mrs Fraser - have a look at my comments on your other two pieces of work and see if you can change some things on here to make it more interesting for the reader. It is mainly sentences you need to work on, as you are using good language.
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