I am in Darwin northern Territory of Australia I am on a deserted road
and there are kangaroos every where I wonder where am I? I walk clueless of
where I am going. The sun is setting I am starving I decide to sleep here I
can’t believe that I am sleeping on dusty sand. The next morning I wake up
effortlessly. I am walking along starving and muttering to my self keep on
walking don’t stop then I see a car racing towards me, The car suddenly stops
right in front of me and takes me home.
Mrs Fraser - I like how you are trying to include WOW words in your writing eg "deserted, muttering". I would now like to see you make some of your sentences shorter as this builds tension eg "...is setting, I am starving. I decide to ...
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