By Georgia
‘Hello’, I
murmured,
‘Is anyone
there’? Creak! I slowly pushed the old wooden door and walked into the
mysterious abandoned house. Aaah! I screamed as I felt something run past my
legs. I looked down and saw a skinny orange cat go past me. I walked into a
large room and screamed as several bats separated from the roof and came at me.
I screamed, tripped and fell into an old rusty bath. I got up to leave, when I heard
the door lock .From the outside. I was trapped. I sat down and started to sob
loudly.
Mrs Fraser
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you have started this Georgia. You have used some WOW words that have helped paint a picture in my mind, I was worried when I read you were trapped inside. I would now like you to see if you can use another word rather than screamed.
Reading this made me feel like I was there - Scary
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