When I got up at 7 am on Saturday, I opened up the curtains
and it looked like it was miserable. I decided that it might be a good idea to
go and have a hot deep bubble bath. I separated the bubbles and slipped into water
when I heard a mysterious noise coming from my bedroom. The house went silent,
there it was again. So I decided to go see what the noise was. So I crept towards the strange sound and I looked
into my bedroom. To my surprise it was a orange cat sitting on my bed.
Great effort Jen 100 words exactly. I like some of the adjectives you used. Could you go back and use a thesaurus to change some of the words to WOW words.
ReplyDeleteI love this picture too - it goes well with the story.
ReplyDeleteHE JEN! THAT STORY WAS REALLY AWSOME- I LIKED HOW YOU WROTE THE FIRST SENTENCE, IT PAINTED A REALLY DETAILED PICTURE IN MY HEAD. MAYBE NEXT TIME YOU COULD USE SOME ONEMATIPOEIA? I REALLY DON'T KNOW HOW TO SPELL THAT WORD!!!
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